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Dark-Skin-Better
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|  Subject: I'M IN LOVE BUT IT'S NOT WITH YOU Wed Feb 27, 2008 10:58 am | |
| I love the way you call my name,
I love the way you play your game.
The way you touch,the way you smile,
Makes me melt down but just for a little while.
Even when you're mad,the look in your eyes,
It turns me on and i forget what it is to be wise.
The flame inside me is now becoming a fire,
I'm so happy you're here,you're every womans' desire.
But baby i got to be real,i got to be true,
I'm so deep in love but it's not with you.
Last edited by Dark-Skin-Better on Wed Nov 26, 2008 4:13 pm; edited 1 time in total | |
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German
Virtuso
Posts : 363
Join date : 2008-01-14
Age : 33
Location : Jamaica
| | Subject: Re: I'M IN LOVE BUT IT'S NOT WITH YOU Wed Feb 27, 2008 11:02 am | |
| damn!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! are u a poet or sumting??? i love this poem | |
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Admin_Jr
Admin_Jr
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Age : 34
Location : Jamaica
| | Subject: Re: I'M IN LOVE BUT IT'S NOT WITH YOU Wed Feb 27, 2008 11:51 am | |
| hello ava you are wasting talent here you know,you should get writing | |
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Dark-Skin-Better
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| | Subject: Re: I'M IN LOVE BUT IT'S NOT WITH YOU Wed Feb 27, 2008 1:19 pm | |
| thanks german ......thanks J , the art of poetry leads my way. to fame n success,wish me the best, ill be on my way,out on the quest. i wont forget those who encouraged me, when am high on the market n living happy.  memba this fi when mi mek it big....mi ago read it pon mi red carpet entrance | |
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Gothica
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| | Subject: Re: I'M IN LOVE BUT IT'S NOT WITH YOU Wed Feb 27, 2008 9:57 pm | |
| hmm i do sense one prob is your poem where is the scenery and the plots i think you should have those values enrolled to be a successful writer | |
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Dark-Skin-Better
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| | Subject: Re: I'M IN LOVE BUT IT'S NOT WITH YOU Thu Feb 28, 2008 8:21 pm | |
| i didnt wanna be the one to have to say this but i dont think this piece needs a scenery or a plot | |
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Dark-Skin-Better
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German
Virtuso
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Age : 33
Location : Jamaica
| | Subject: Re: I'M IN LOVE BUT IT'S NOT WITH YOU Thu Feb 28, 2008 9:14 pm | |
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Admin_Jr
Admin_Jr
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Location : Jamaica
| | Subject: Re: I'M IN LOVE BUT IT'S NOT WITH YOU Tue Mar 04, 2008 1:08 pm | |
| ye gothica u lost that battle | |
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